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Qjai
03-21-2002, 11:44 AM
Not sure what to call this...


Along came you
totally new
breath of fresh air
special and rare
intrigued my mind
sweet and kind
fun on the town
laughing at the clown
that I saw in you
gigglin at the things you do
then you said "I can see a lot in you,
based on what you say and do"
Seemed like frienship on the rise
i never saw the early demise
I guess what you said you didn't really feel
cause then you'd know the real deal
when my character was on the line
you didn't choose to stand behind
that initial impression I left in your heart
and the problem you say is on my part?
even though you didn't stay
i feel bad, i didn't get the chance to say
that it may have been a game to you
but my friendship was real and true, i trusted you...
so even though you ignored
the real me and decided to close the door
i'll walk away knowing the real deal
knowing what was false and what was real
knowing I tried to be good to you
I just couldn't do what u asked me to do
you but me in a really bad place
tight situation, uncomfortable space
ultimately what started new
ended so fast...now im losing you
Gods will be done
we did have fun
If you saw with your heart
then you'd see mine
despite what went down
you'd know
I wasn't on that kind of time


(written a long time ago, i just decided to share)

Tastey
03-21-2002, 12:50 PM
I like that alot Qjai. I can feel what you felt.

Qjai
03-21-2002, 05:40 PM
Despite the typos.....thanks a lot Tastey. Glad I haven't lost my "pen" :D

HulaSista
03-21-2002, 07:54 PM
i like the overall appearance of the piece. its structured to start short and grow in the middle, then shorten again at the end.

PLUS... the story was told intimately. i like that.

wood007
03-22-2002, 04:54 AM
possible title = Your Loss

one:afro

que90nek
03-22-2002, 09:34 AM
thanks.

jaila
04-28-2006, 03:10 PM
u ever read shit u wrote and can't believe it was you? how bout i dont even remember writing this LOL

ERinger
04-28-2006, 03:50 PM
I look back on some of the stuff I wrote and think that I'm not even the same person anymore to write such stuff. My creativity has taken hiatus for a while. Perhaps it's been so long since I've had any that I can't find my muse.

jaila
04-28-2006, 03:52 PM
thats me right there. I can't write like that now. I just dont sit down long enough no more.

wood007
05-01-2006, 06:56 AM
you know u have to make some time to write. how have u been?

jaila
05-01-2006, 10:31 AM
as jai falls out her damn chair in disbelief...i know i didnt just read a post from wood??? :eek: hold on, let me get my oxygen and breathe...be right back

wood007
05-03-2006, 03:16 PM
r u ok? yes u did read a post from wood....lol... miss me? lol:afro

jaila
05-03-2006, 06:31 PM
u know i do!!! nice to see a brovah is still living and breathing and well. Glad to see you!!! :D